Review of Literacy Narrative

Now that I have finished my Literacy Narrative I am relieved. It is turned in and complete. But there are some things I would have liked to be different in the process of writing the essay. When I wrote the outline I thought about what I wanted to incorporate and the times that made a big difference to me in my career as a reader and writer. Except, the process of writing my paper could have been spread out instead of sitting down and writing 5 paragraphs throughout one night. I think it would have been more beneficial to write one or two a night instead of just going for it all at once. I feel each paragraph would have been a little bit better developed because I would put the time in for each paragraph. I am quickly learning the difficulties with golf and traveling as well as trying to balance my schoolwork. I was rushed when writing the narrative. Although it is better than I was expecting, there are a few steps I could have taken to make it even better. Within the paper, I worried that I had too much story telling and not enough telling the reader why the event is important to me. On the other hand, by making the reader fully understand the situation that happened and the way it made me feel, they still understand the reason as to where I stand today. Some explanations could have been a bit more descriptive but I have hard time finding the words to help me describe my thoughts. I tend to have the ideas, but struggle putting it down on the paper. To go with struggling to put words on the paper in the way I want, I have a hard time with grammar. For some, it comes naturally and they do not have to even think about it, whereas I have the hardest time deciding when to use a comma. I either go overboard with commas, or I don't use them near enough. At times in my paper I would change from past to present, back to past causing confusion as the reader read my narrative. I think I fixed all of those spots though.  Overall I am satisfied with the paper, but I think it could be a little better with time.